#2 “Integrity”
Well, when she puts it like that…
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The Monster Under the Bed
“Embrace your fear.”
Well, when she puts it like that…
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oh I like this. its very cute.
Thank you!
Oh…Oh dear, this is adorable.
Thank you! 🙂
That’s almost exactly what my reaction was. Just tack on an “I must have more”.
So he’s 18 here? Well, I can understand that you wanted to play it safe, but he doesn’t look 18. 15, maybe.
Keep in mind I was still learning how to draw him (them both, really) back in the early pages. Next time we cut back to them in that period, they will (hopefully) look more correct. Especially since he’ll be 18 for the majority of the story, once I’m finished (haha…. oh god!) with all the setup.
In a way, I can attribute this to personal experience, for back when I was 18, I did not look 18. That’s why I grew a nice beard. 😉 (sure, that’s why!) Actually, in rare cases some folks would guess I’m still in my mid-twenties, it’s happened before lots of times. I mean….. I’m 32, so hey, I don’t exactly mind.
excuse me but when will the next chapter come out?
The next Chapter? or the next page?
Because the next page will be up this Sunday, the next chapter will probably be up a few months from now.
Pfffft. Beards are nasty.
Go for sideburns instead. Much more respectable choice of facial décor.
I know that feel. Most who look at me think I’m in my early teens. But I’m 27. Being only 4 foot 8 and a half inches tall (interestingly enough that is the width between the rails on the railway. Adds a bit of a funny joke to my love of trains.) will do that to you. Also the fact my voice sounds like a ten year old doesn’t help. Glad my beard is starting to grow in finally.
Oh my how lewd
Continuing my attempt at righting a blind friendly script:
Panel 1:
Description: The monster stands behind the man with her hands on his shoulders.
Dialogue:
Monster: You could at least *fake* *it* for once…
Panel 2:
Description: The man is smiling.
Man: And shatter your *integrity* as a monster?
Panel 3:
Description: View of monster’s face. She’s smiling.
Man (off panel): I think not.
Panel 4:
Description: Monster hugs him from behind with one arm and kisses him on the other cheek. Her tail wraps itself around him.
No dialogue
Panel 5:
Description: She’s still hugging him and has her tail around him. Now she’s got her face resting on his shoulder and has a dirty grin.
Dialogue:
Man: So, what do you feel like doing tonight?
Monster: Well…You *do* owe me a scream…
Editing
Panel 1:
Description: The monster stands behind the man with her hands on his shoulders.
Dialogue:
Monster: You could at least *fake* *it* for once…
Panel 2:
Description: The man is smiling.
Dialogue:
Man: And shatter your *integrity* as a monster?
Panel 3:
Description: View of monster’s face. She’s smiling.
Dialogue:
Man (off panel): I think not.
Panel 4:
Description: Monster hugs him from behind with one arm and kisses him on the other cheek. Her tail wraps itself around him.
No dialogue
Panel 5:
Description: She’s still hugging him and has her tail around him. Now she’s got her face resting on his shoulder and has a dirty grin.
Dialogue:
Man: So, what do you feel like doing tonight?
Monster: Well…You *do* owe me a scream…
Putting the names in:
Panel 1:
Description: Shadow stands behind the Tim with her hands on his shoulders.
Dialogue:
Monster: You could at least *fake* *it* for once…
Panel 2:
Description: Tim is smiling.
Dialogue:
Tim: And shatter your *integrity* as a monster?
Panel 3:
Description: View of Shadow’s face. She’s smiling.
Dialogue:
Tim (off panel): I think not.
Panel 4:
Description: Shadow hugs him from behind with one arm and kisses him on the other cheek. Her tail wraps itself around him.
No dialogue
Panel 5:
Description: She’s still hugging him and has her tail around him. Now she’s got her face resting on his shoulder and has a dirty grin.
Dialogue:
Tim: So, what do you feel like doing tonight?
Shadow: Well…You *do* owe me a scream…
Panel 1:
Description: Shadow stands behind the Tim with her hands on his shoulders.
Dialogue:
Shadow: You could at least *fake* *it* for once…
Panel 2:
Description: Tim is smiling.
Dialogue:
Tim: And shatter your *integrity* as a monster?
Panel 3:
Description: View of Shadow’s face. She’s smiling.
Dialogue:
Tim (off panel): I think not.
Panel 4:
Description: Shadow hugs him from behind with one arm and kisses him on the other cheek. Her tail wraps itself around him.
No dialogue
Panel 5:
Description: She’s still hugging him and has her tail around him. Now she’s got her face resting on his shoulder and has a dirty grin.
Dialogue:
Tim: So, what do you feel like doing tonight?
Shadow: Well…You *do* owe me a scream…
this is one of the best oc i have seen on fj. i like it a lot has good story vibe and some kinky parts to. i look forward to it all coming together. and i guess he is a little more then friends with the monster under his bead ;3.
Thanks! Yes, yes he is certainly going to become VERY good friends with her.
I thought that this story would be an amazing anime but do what you will.
Can’t argue with that! Point me in the direction of an interested studio!
I echo alex g, this would make a fantastic anime, or even on Adult Swim. It kinda reminds me of Everyday Monster Girls in some respects.
I caught this by fluke yesterday, but I’ll be a regular reader from now in.
add me in as another regular reader!
So cute
She’s so cute! I wish I had a monster under the bed like her.
…..I like it
I just noticed I goofed up lel
Very cute!