#3 “It’s Complicated”
A monster ON a bed… huh. I wonder how that happened?
Well, well. Page 3 is finally here! I hope everyone is enjoying the comic so far!
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This is coming out pretty nice!
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Nice comic, I like the concept.
Thank you! I’m happy you like my comic so far.
This is so cute!!
Thank you kindly! 🙂
*smirks*
Starting off with a “bang”?
*shakes her head*
Sorry, I just could not help myself.
Heh, that’s alright. I really did start off that way!
*smiles*
Nice outfit by the way.
Thank you very much! I put a lot of work into it for cons and Halloween. That sort of thing. 🙂
*raises an eyebrow*
So you are a real “Con Man”?
*snickers*
Me? No no… though I do have some great lakeside property if you were interested. 😉
But seriously, Cons are cool. I’d love to go to more than I have, if I ever had the time, that is.
Alas, I must stick to the immediately local ones.
*nods*
Very understandable, I have friends who have gone to cons quite a ways from home, and it is a costly and time consuming project.
Oh yes, absolutely. Heh, for now I’ll just stick to the annual comic-con in the big city next door. Much cheaper! XD
Once I start making the big bucks off this little enterprise I’ll make sure to travel more!
Heh, oh lord. XD
Huh..I’m having flashback to Xxenophile stories from your intro so far…nicely done!
XD I don’t know what Xxenophile stories are exactly… but thank you anyway? *shrug*
Ah, sorry – figured they were fairly well known.
Phil Foglio, who is currently making the Girl Genius comic, published a series of erotic and fun comic stories in the early nineties. The way this story is shaping up, it might fit well. 🙂 wiki covers them here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/XXXenophile
Possibly it could have fit in from what I read there. Sounded like a unique little series.
I notice what looks like a scar from a claw mark on his shoulder there.
Yep! There’s a bit of a story there.
I hope that Tim have a really creepy story about this scars, because reality so boring.
Hmmm, creepy? Not exactly. Not exactly boring though, either! 😉
I say about Tim, not you. You a “reality”. For example i have small scar on left knee. Reality about it too boring(i fall on small sharp stone in my childhood), but i can have a creepy story about arrow hit me. A lo-o-ong creepy story.
Ha, I noticed the same myself, now if only I had noticed your comment about it before I posted my own. Definitely something to make the imagination run wild with how this whole comic has started off.
Btw, a monster UNDER the bed is definitely she. But who from them two is a monster ON a bed? I don’t sure about it. 🙂
Oh, we all will find out eventually! 🙂
Do not scare me, because now i read only until 3th chapter on DA But tomorrow i will know ALWAYS.
P.s. i swear that i don’t post spoiler, but near-spoiler and spoiler-like curiosity fuel(like nightmare fuel, but curiosity) will present, because it so funny.
Shit, not always, just “ALL”. Well, i must going to sleep, i think.
You can definitely see your expertise within the paintings you write. The world hopes for more passionate writers such as you who aren’t afraid to mention how they believe. At all times go after your heart.
Well I wasn’t expecting that… This was my reaction. http://www.gifbin.com/984836
Heh. I think her eyes might be acting like that in this scene too!
I hope this comic contains more chapters, because the truth has me somewhat addicted lol, I check the browser 3 and 4 verse a day to see if you went something new XD
Of course it has more chapters! Lots more chapters! 🙂
I am glad that, besides I have a great admiration for the simple design. this very good
In the interest of constructive criticism, the second panel doesn’t “feel” well laid out to me. Something about the perspective, or the way the characters are positioned, kind of make it feel like Tim is looking down toward the front of the panel – into the fourth wall, slightly, though not enough to even be deliberately nudging it, let alone breaking it. But he should ideally be looking at monster girl.
I’ll admit, I’m not an artist myself. But I read more than enough webcomics to see this kind of blocking all the time. I think it could be fixed either by moving the monster girl slightly into the foreground, to give the image a little more depth, or by simply shifting the colored part of Tim’s eyes right a little bit, so that it looks more like he’s looking at her, or rotating him slightly more. As it is, though, it feels a little flat and “wrong.”
Yeah, I know, it’s probably my least favorite panel I’ve drawn, but such is life. They can’t all be winners and you must move on.
Perhaps someday I’ll go back and fix some stuff.
yeah i agree i think all it needs is really a lil turn of his head towards her and to look in her eyes! other than that this comic is very very good! i enjoy the cuteness of it a lot! also i think i good way to fix it and other things could be to say at the end of every chapter you could perhaps give yourself a week off posting new pages and spend that week fixing either several small mistakes or one large one! also while you do that you could be coming up with what to do for next chapter! its a win win right?
Is it just me, or in the 4th panel, does he have claw marks on his right shoulder? Ole Timmy likes it a rough, ah, rough it seems.
Well, there’s a story behind that… 😉
I actually just now noticed that too when looking back through it, you really don’t skim on the detail! Loving the work so far btw, keep it up!
Thanks! Yes, I have plans within plans. XD
I would give anything to be in his positionright now! XD
😛
I see that you have change the gaze of Tim in panel 2. I remember his first gaze wasn’t on Shadow. ^_^
Among several other changes as well!
Judging by the scar on Tim’s shoulder, it would be safe to assume that Shadow at one point scratched him, possibly in their first night together. She must of felt so good and grabbed him, accidentally scratching him.
Hmmm… nope! Err, well, yes! She does leave her mark, but never so permanent like that. That one is something else!
I wonder about 5th cut sene. Who is the monster and human. Cuz usually in that situation, woman is downside man is upside. But tails direction is looks like upside shadows own. So it means is Tim woman and monster is man?
and I’m sorry about my english. Its not my langue.
Tim’s on top, Shadow is underneath. Her tail is going up between his legs.